My first character. He needs more building!

[peach]

Ok, I know this isn't the character approval thread, but I just wanted some critque before I submit it for approval.

So, I hear 6th gen was very recently approved. To approve of this, I'm making a character of one of my favorite 6th pokemon!!! I'm making a Froakie. I admit it, he's going to match a good number of Froakie cliches. I'm kind of going for a ninja in training, but not necessarily acting like a ninja. In fact, proooobably not acting like one. So I'm gonna explain the rest of what I got in a character sheet.

-General-

Name: River.

Gender:Male

Species:Froakie

Age:18? (Still debating)

Residence:Dang, I didn't look this up yet. XD

Sexuality:Um, I guess straight. No offense, but not really sure why this is so important.

Occupation:Again, need to look into that more.

-Physical-

Ability:Torrent

Moves:
-Mud Sport
-Bounce
-Bubble
-Water Pulse
(This is just an idea and I'm open to suggestions. Also, I did the math, and these moves do fit the point limit.

Stats:
I'm still debating, too much to even make a WIP. He was supposed to be smart, but also strong (for his size) and agile. That's hard to do with the set limits. I understand and all, just explaining my delama.

Strength:

Special:

Cleverness:

Endurance and Evasiveness:

Luck:

Appearance:I don't have anything special in mind, but I'm open to suggestions

-Character-

Alignment:I'm going for a chaotic good thing here. It's not that he hates law. He just thinks of them as more guidelines.

Personality:He's supposed to be kind of laid back, but not without a sense of honor, and despite being smart, he's supposed to have a simple mind. I want the general view to be like a smart odd ball I guess.

Bio:All I got is I figure the whole Ninja thing is passed down through ancestry, and that's about it.

-Other-

Theme Song:If one is found, I will be happy, but so far I got nothing.

Relationships:

Crush/Romantic Relationships:

Other:

[mrcammaster4]

So far, what you have looks good. I have to agree with you on the Sexuality. I was just recently made admin and did not make the character application. The personality works well. All it needs is a little rewording. You could mention his thoughts of the law being guidelines in his personality. Fly appearance, you can say a standard Froakie and add any little details you want on to that. The stats are what they are. Sometimes you've gotta make sacrifices. Just take all the time you need to come up with the best character you can. I look forward to RPing with you!

[peach]

Well, that's nice and helpful and whatnot, but I am having trouble with one thing. What would I have as an occupation? I mean, I know I said he's a ninja in training, but that's hardly a job, plus I don't know what he's supposed to do with it, or what his family does with it for that matter. Any ideas?

Oh, and thank you and sorry for not saying that to begin with.

[mrcammaster4]

Completely fine. I'm glad to help. River's occupation can be nothing and it would be fine. Many people have put looking to join a team so it's completely viable to say ninja in training.

Just ask if you need any more help!

[peach]

Again, that's helpful, and thank you, but that doesn't quite answer everything. I blame myself for not being specific enough. Anyway, I was hoping for help on what River's supposed to do with all his ninja training and such, at least according to his trainer. (Likely to be one of his parents, but not 100% certain of that, so just wording it safely.) I know the final decision is mine, but I'd just like a little guidance and some tips on the matter.

[mrcammaster4]

Hmm, well, what we could think of is "what do ninjas do usually?" I'm not going to act like you don't know, so none of that teaching stuff. Anyway, a few suggestions for a ninja is a mercenary, a hit man, or a bodyguard. Anything that really involves Ricer getting paid to do a job that's not exploring a dungeon.

[peach]

Alrighty, I think I can take it from here. Thanks for the help, and with luck, I shall have the official app made today.

[mrcammaster4]

Awesome! Glad I could help!